Monday, February 11, 2008

Paragraph1--Cause and effect

This year, 2008, people focus more on Beijing because of the coming Olympic Games. People not concern about the rate of process of all the facilities, but also care about the air quality in Beijing. The air quality in Beijing keeps going down during the past few years. The main cause for the problem is the number of private cars keeps going up. As the number of cars increases, the exhaust gas from the cars increases exponentially. Therefore, this is the main factor of air pollution in Beijing. Since cause is already very obvious, what is the effect then? Because most of the games are outdoor games in Olympics, so the low quality air is bad for all the athletes’ health. Moreover, the audiences will also suffer a lot form the dirty air. Before Beijing was selected to be the host for 2008 Olympics Games, the Beijing government’s slogan is “let’s try our very best to make the 2008 Olympics become a Green Olympics.” Hence, the Beijing government should really try his very best to improve the air quality in Beijing. Let’s step by step to improve the air quality. Let’s hand in hand to hold a green Olympic Games.

2 comments:

Boon Woei said...

I hope Beijing Olympic can be done well, because it's a wish from every chinese in world, even though I'm Malaysian.
I think the "exponentially" not really function well here, it's just a math term. Instead of that "dramatically" is preferred. Well it's just my personal opinion. =)

Brad Blackstone said...

Thanks, Steve, for the post. This is fairly well organized, but it would be richer if you could add some statistics for Beijing on the number of cars, the amount of exhaust fumes or the annual increase in air pollution.

Also, you need to review your language use in a few sentences:

1) People not concern about the rate of process of all the facilities....

2) Because most of the games are outdoor games in Olympics, so the low quality air is bad for all the athletes’ health.

I appreciate your hard work!